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专栏作者:唐伟胜
新航道特约雅思学术顾问
广东外语外贸大学教授、博士
中国知名英语教育导师
《9分达人雅思写作真题还原及解析3》作者
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2019年3月23日
雅思大作文题目
学校和家庭对孩子的影响谁更大?
“Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. ”
解析&审题
本题是教育类老题。
孩子上学后,无论是学习还是社会能力发展,老师的作用都比父母的作用更大,你是否同意这个观点?
这个题目明确地区分了两种发展,即intellectual 以及social的发展,前者指的是学习方面,后面指的是学习之外的社会交往能力方面。对于这种题目,我们完全可以用“分情况讨论”这种写作策略。比如,我们可以论证,在学习方面,老师的作用更大(这个很容易论证),但在社交能力培养方面,父母的影响好像会更大一些,最后指出,教师和家长一起对孩子的学习和社会能力负责,这两者在很多情况下其实是不可分的。
各位烤鸭,你是怎么写的呢?以下请看唐老师的高分范文。
老师笔记
01
Teachers and parents share responsibility for the education and socialization of children. In my opinion, while teachers may have a bigger impact on children’s intellectual development, parents play a more important role in children’s social development.
教师和家长对儿童的教育和社会化都负有责任。在我看来,虽然老师可能对孩子的学业发展有更大的影响,但家长们却在儿童的社会发展中扮演更重要的角色。
解析
(1) 开篇即亮出自己的观点:老师和父母同时为孩子的教育和社交能力负责,但老师在学业方面的影响更多,而父母在社交能力发展方面作用更大。用词方面,本范文也注意到变化,比如while teachers have a bigger impact on...,parents play a more important role in...
(2) Impact 影响
(3) Intellectual development 智力发展;学业发展
02
On the one hand, teachers are in school to help children succeed academically, and here lies teachers’ influence. Teachers keep children focused on study and, as a result, have more influence on their intellectual development. Although children may spend more time with parents even after they start school, teachers are the ones who help children with their reading, writing, and mathematics, and tell them about the world outside the comfort of family life. That is why children’s academic performance is more a sign of effective teaching than great parenting.
一方面,教师在学校帮助孩子在学业上取得成功,这就是教师的影响。教师让孩子们专注于学习,从而对他们的智力发展产生更大的影响。尽管孩子们甚至在开始上学后也会花更多的时间和父母在一起,但老师才是帮助孩子们阅读、写作和数学的人,并告诉他们舒适的家庭生活之外的世界。这就是为什么孩子们的学业成绩更多的是有效教学的标志,而不是伟大的父母教育的标志。
解析
(1) 本段论述为什么老师对孩子的学业教育更加重要。从学校的职责谈起,然后讨论学生能从老师那里学习什么东西。本段的最后一句话类似一个段落总结。
(2) Academically 学习上地
(3) Focus on... 聚焦于......
(4) Effective 有效的
03
On the other hand, parents are the key elements in children’s social development. In other words, children usually rely more on parents than teachers when it comes to acquiring good social behaviors. Parents are the ultimate role models to their children. In most cases, the desired social behaviors are taught through a variety of accumulating experiences stemming from parents’ influence rather than teachers’. Actually, every word, movement or action from parents has an effect on children who observe and then do the same in their upcoming life. Compared to teachers, therefore, parents have more power to influence the social lives of their children.
另一方面,父母是儿童社会发展的关键因素。换句话说,在获得良好的社会行为方面,孩子们通常更多地依赖父母而不是老师。父母是孩子的The ultimate榜样。在大多数情况下,理想的社会行为是通过各种累积的经验而获得的,而这些经验来自父母的影响而非老师的影响。事实上,父母的每一句话、动作或行动都会对孩子产生影响,孩子们观察并会在即将到来的生活中做同样的事情。因此,与教师相比,父母有更多的力量来影响孩子的社会生活。
解析
(1) 本段论述为什么父母对孩子的社交能力发展影响更大。本段使用的是层层解释法。最后一句是段落总结。
(2) Rely on... 依赖于......
(3) Ultimate 最终的
(4) Role model 榜样
(5) A variety of... 各种各样的
(6) Stem from... 来自于......
04
In conclusion, teachers work together with parents in influencing the intellectual and social development of children. Though theoretically we can draw a line between the school influence and parental influence, in reality it is merely a matter of degrees since these two influences are not mutually exclusive.
总之,教师与家长共同努力来影响儿童的智力和社会发展。虽然从理论上讲,我们可以在学校影响和父母影响之间划一条界线,但实际上这只是一个程度问题,因为这两种影响并不是相互排斥的。
解析
(1) 结论段是总结,并提出自己的结论:虽然可以区分学校影响和父母影响,但二者其实是不可分的。
(2) Theoretically 理论上地
(3) Draw a ling between A and B 在A和B中划界限;区分A和B
(4) In reality 实际上
(5) Merely 只是
(6) A matter of degree 一个程度问题
7分范文
Teachers and parents share responsibility for the education and socialization of children. In my opinion, while teachers may have a bigger impact on children’s intellectual development, parents play a more important role in children’s social development.
On the one hand, teachers are in school to help children succeed academically, and here lies teachers’ influence. Teachers keep children focused on study and, as a result, have more influence on their intellectual development. Although children may spend more time with parents even after they start school, teachers are the ones who help children with their reading, writing, and mathematics, and tell them about the world outside the comfort of family life. That is why children’s academic performance is more a sign of effective teaching than great parenting.
On the other hand, parents are the key elements in children’s social development. In other words, children usually rely more on parents than teachers when it comes to acquiring good social behaviors. Parents are the ultimate role models to their children. In most cases, the desired social behaviors are taught through a variety of accumulating experiences stemming from parents’ influence rather than teachers’. Actually, every word, movement or action from parents has an effect on children who observe and then do the same in their upcoming life. Compared to teachers, therefore, parents have more power to influence the social lives of their children.
In conclusion, teachers work together with parents in influencing the intellectual and social development of children. Though theoretically we can draw a line between the school influence and parental influence, in reality it is merely a matter of degrees since these two influences are not mutually exclusive.
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建议背诵的句子
1. In my opinion, while teachers may have a bigger impact on children’s intellectual development, parents play a more important role in children’s social development.
在我看来,虽然老师可能对孩子的学业发展有更大的影响,但家长们却在儿童的社会发展中扮演更重要的角色。
2. Although children may spend more time with parents even after they start school, teachers are the ones who help children with their reading, writing, and mathematics, and tell them about the world outside the comfort of family life.
这主要是因为,与电视、广播和网络相比,传统上大家认为报纸是最严肃的新闻渠道,而后者通常被视为娱乐媒体。
3. In most cases, the desired social behaviors are taught through a variety of accumulating experiences stemming from parents’ influence rather than teachers’. Actually, every word, movement or action from parents has an effect on children who observe and then do the same in their upcoming life.
在大多数情况下,理想的社会行为是通过各种累积的经验而获得的,而这些经验来自父母的影响而非老师的影响。事实上,父母的每一句话、动作或行动都会对孩子产生影响,孩子们观察并会在即将到来的生活中做同样的事情。
4. Though theoretically we can draw a line between the school influence and parental influence, in reality it is merely a matter of degrees since these two influences are not mutually exclusive.
虽然从理论上讲,我们可以在学校影响和父母影响之间划一条界线,但实际上这只是一个程度问题,因为这两种影响并不是相互排斥的。
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