应对

Some people say that the economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger; while some say that economic growth is harmful to the environment, so we must stop it now.

Discuss both of the views and give your own opinion.

这个题目

学生在开头段落的句写了下面这句话：

Some people think that the only effective way to end global poverty and hunger is developing the world’s economy, but some hold an extreme idea that we must cease the economic growth because of the environmental degradation it brings.

我们来看教师修改后的句子，如下：

Some people think that the only effective way to end global poverty and hunger is developing the world’s economy, but some oppose this idea. Their rebuttal, the opposite and rather extreme idea, is that we must cease the economic growth because of the environmental degradation it brings.

▲ 首先，原来的一句话拆成了两句话。句的 but 后只是说到 some oppose this idea，但是没有说到具体的反对观点是什么。第二句开始，单独一句话说了反对观点是什么。这样的处理方式叫做“缓急”，也就是不着急一句话里塞满了信息(导致一句话的信息量过大，读者读起来感觉费劲)，而是在句话里或者是让句话成为第二句话的“引子”。

▲ 反对观点放在第二句话里，单独成句后，一上来就有了一个设计语法现象(同位语)的机会。

▲ 注意词汇：oppose 和 rebuttal(是rebut的名词)