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3分钟学会一个雅思7分句系列(三十八)
2020-08-20 13:36   作者:新航道   阅读量:

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In some countries, people waste a lot of food which is bought in shops and restaurants.


What do you think are the reasons?


What can be done to solve this problem?


这个题目



这个题目, 学生在主体部分某段落有一句话写道:



In terms of restaurants, they can carry out some incentive mechanism to ensure that food is completely eaten by customers.





比较于教师修改后的句子:



In terms of restaurants, they can develop policies to prevent excess orders, and there could also be incentives for diners to eat up what’s on their plates. 











* 修改后的句子比原句的结构简单(两个简单的句子的并列),读起来也更顺畅。


* 修改后的句子中,动词和名词的选择以及搭配更合理:develop polices、prevent excess orders、there could also be incentives、eat up what’s on their plates. 对比于原句中的carry out some mechanism(“实施某种机制”。读者的内心OS:“听起来怕怕的”)以及ensure(“保证”。读者的内心OS:“你怎么保证人家吃完?人家就是各种原因没吃完,你是要把人家怎样?”)


* eat up 替代 be completely eaten 是个很重要的语言现象:eat up更习语,be completely eaten 再此处显生硬。diner(“食客”)替代 customer是个词汇量的问题,这些不起眼的单词,其实扫描扫描词汇表就可以迅速学到学会。



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